Choking Hazards

[AMK]

Is it okay that I whore my web comic here? Well then!



Found here.

This is my favorite one so far. They only get more disturbing after that.

[Ban]

He gonna stab a bitch... this is relevant to my interests

[AMK]

Oh why thank you.

The comic is still in progress. Scary, I know.

We had a break week, so a "guest comic" went up.

Check it.

Also, Choking Hazards now has it's very own forum. This is gonna get out of hand.

[alphatroll]

Ah, so Doombunny *isn't* the usual co-author-whatever? I keep missing his handle.....

[AMK]

Tell me what you guys think of these comics. I've been contemplating my artistic style and thinking maybe pursuing this old style something much simpler, albeit maybe more original, is in order.

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Be as horribly honest as you need to be. I need it.

[The Flying Dracula Hair]

My one big thing, and this is with most character artist's, is that the people look too static. All your backdrops and objects are portrayed dynamically but the players don't seem to follow suit. Check out page 121 of Serenity and look at the three panels in the middle to the right. It's only focused on her head, yet in those three small panels so much is going on.

See how expressive you made the computer "shots" in Data? You need to start applying that to your characters.

And on the static subject, the more action oriented parts also feel a little too stiff, and could make better use of lines of action:
http://johnkstuff.blogspot.com/uploaded ... 749469.jpg

And the style in Choking Hazards is in my opinion, just too reminiscent of Johnny.




BTW the latest comic is HILARIOUS

[AMK]

The latest comic is perhaps my most favorite. The gas mask fellow is my REAL LIFE (gasp) friend Parker, who does all my coloring and half the writing of the strips. That is really him. He wears a gas mask and top hat with that outfit all the time. When I drew him it was freaking eerie how much it resembled him.

Rambling aside:

I am contemplating taking a break from the Choking Hazards comics (such as they are) and put up Broken Mirror or Razors comics for a duration, while I work feverishly to develop my Choking Hazards art style and make it much less Vasquezy. I've slowly been getting more original, but I'm still keep feeling like such a hack.

Thoughts?

[The Flying Dracula Hair]

You are definitely departing from it and the latest comic seems more your own, I almost took it back when I read the latest one.

All my favorite art of yours is the pieces with YOU in it. You draw your very distinctively.


What you want to do with Choking Hazards should absolutely be what you're comfortable with, but keep in mind how many web comic artists developed their art just doing their comic.

http://girlyyy.com/

http://www.penny-arcade.com/

Leaps and bounds from first to most recent.

Pushing forward with Choking Hazards may be the very thing to keep you developing your own art and style.


BTW your friend haunts me O_O

[AMK]

Okay kids. New character designs (the face, at least.)

Tell me your thoughts.

[alphatroll]

Tell me what you guys think of these comics. I've been contemplating my artistic style and thinking maybe pursuing this old style something much simpler, albeit maybe more original, is in order.

Link 1

Link 2

Link 3

Be as horribly honest as you need to be. I need it.

LOVE the first one. & it looks plenty expressive to me. I mean, I've seen better 'n' all, but I do have a weakness for the simple look.

heh. spoon.

[Slinker]

I read throw most of the Choking Hazards comics to attempt give some clever feedback. But The Flying dracula hair said the stuff I wanted to say. (Curse you!) So I may just repeat the stuff he simply but anyway, heres what I thought:

Choking Hazards had one big flaw that was not mentioned. I didn't really find it funny. Sure some of it was pretty "funny" and some of the ideas are good. But I didn't get into the characters and some jokes was just unclear.

For exampel this one:

http://chokinghazards.net/?p=163

First thing, I really dislike arrows pointing on what panel I should read next. Because it's a thing that should come naturally. And when I read this one I didn't even notice the arrows. So I read it and the realised that I read it in the wrong order. It may sound like no huge damage but such things create a bad flow in reading the comics. And I miss how you are trying to build up the dynamic in the second panel.

And the way this joke is put just makes it appear very random. Random situations is not bad but we have to believe in the characters who are in them. The green guy for exampel. I don't really gets his reaction. I mean, this is the guy that went throw hell without even blink and he goes to tibet for that? And he dosen't really seem botherd, there is no real reaction on him. It's more "huh, I'm going to tibet now, cya!"

I think your characters really have to losen up a bit. I would really like to see more reactions. I get that they are having a pretty laid back personality, but that doesn't make them inhuman. In the above shark comic for exampel. I think that comic would have been better if you for exampel just made one image after the middle one. With the green guy looking at his "friend". With that extrem hate look, that you understand that he really needs to get away before he do something he regrets. Or perhaps just look at him like he is about to cry then close the door silently like the comic does, take an airplane to to tibet and there in the middle of the mountians, scream out in frustration that no man has heard for years.

In either of the two ways it gives the green guy more personality in diffrent ways.

As Flying hair said, penny-arcade is a good exampel. Two slacker friends that hangs around togther. With their own personalties and we get how they are diffrent from eachother and how they are similar by just reading a few randomly choosen comics. But even if they are very laid back and unbotherd by most problems. There is still stuff that makes them react strongly.

http://www.penny-arcade.com/images/2009/20090603.jpg

But anyway. Keep it up!

And I think that broken mirror looks awesome. ^^


Damn why do I writte these things when I should go to bed?

EDIT: Wopps, linked the wrong comic page that I was talking about. Must have been tired. ^^

[alphatroll]

For exampel this one:

http://chokinghazards.net/?p=163

First thing, I really dislike arrows pointing on what panel I should read next......[/i]

Wait.... there are arrows there?

{staring intently}

oooohhhh yeahhh, i can just make them out......

Prolly that particular one's not really much of an example of anything though, since it's really just bridging two others together. But yeah, it's a bit confusing. I figure the main reason I can appreciate choking hazards in general is because I'm so insane it seems relatively sensible to me..... but that's just one loonie's opinion.

[The Flying Dracula Hair]

Ha ha, I thought the sharks one was funny. That made me laugh.

I never thought about arrows in comics, I just sort of obey them. I guess it's kind of a strain, but I think the biggest problem with that comic is that your eyes go from the first panel to the large center panel, then you have to go back and figure out what the story is. I think that one is good storytelling overall.

Slinker's right about the varying expressions. Also try to start with lines of action.

The new character design differences are subtle, but feels to this one guy like a good direction. Waiting to see more!

[AMK]

New comic. I'm pretty proud of it, art wise.

[alphatroll]

Also, Choking Hazards now has it's very own forum. This is gonna get out of hand.

Outta hand is right! I make *ONE* post and I'm on the "Top Posters" list! That just ain't natural!